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My Mommy and Me - deadandwalking - 01-14-2010 07:59 AM
Here's another 5 pager that I just typed up for another contest. This time I have plenty of time to tweek it so please critique.
RE: My Mommy and Me - Heywood U. Eatabrain - 01-23-2010 10:41 PM
I thought it was pretty slick. Would play out nicely on film I think.
I wouldn't mind seeing a subtle tie between the husband and the delivery man, be it in the cut scene on the phone, or at the end, but I can also see why you'd leave that vague/up for interpretation.
RE: My Mommy and Me - Old Dwarf - 01-24-2010 01:51 PM
It's nicely paced & it does leave you with a lot of questions
& wanting more.
What is the contest about (it's criteria)?
OD