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Junior High of the Dead: Chapters 1-6 - Rough Draft
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01-09-2013, 10:03 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-09-2013 10:04 PM by JurassicTimes.)
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RE: Junior High of the Dead: Chapters 1-6 - Rough Draft
(01-09-2013 10:00 PM)samuraitrev Wrote: I enjoyed reading your new prologue although I'm confused how it relates to Junior. I liked how her life flashed before her eyes this gave the character depth. You told us a little about the setting and you didn't over do it and lose my interest. However I would rework the wording at the end of the prologue. Reading it now, it does seem a bit clunky. I'll change it soon. It doesn't immediately intertwine with Junior High, but it does as I said in chapter six, and chapter eight. It's what leads to the large amount of undead in the alleyway that leads to Sara's demise in Chapter Six. |
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